Monday, March 5, 2012
Making the Familiar Unfamiliar
Your soul returns, you breathe life again. This sealed box is not the same as you remembered. You lost control of your eyelids, let your mind run free and here you are. The cloudy veil that gently swept across everything has now been lifted off; all is still there untouched, just clearer and more vibrant. You glance at the clear square of the wall to see that it has arrived again. It pierces the glass but does no damage, not meaning to harm but to remind us of what is ahead.
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Great description and a lovely opening to a piece of writing - very intriguing. So much better than 'I woke up'.
ReplyDeleteDon't forget to be ambitious with your punctuationa nd sentence varation too.
Great work Lena!